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  1. Larsi

    Larsi

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    @Finalbeta
    Still a bit simplistic, but you are improving your descriptions. For special attacks you need to include the full description of your special technique in a spoiler tag like this:
    -Sanjuroku Pound Ho (三十六煩悩(ポンド)鳳 Sanjūroku Pondo Hō?, kanji meaning "Phoenix of the 36 Earthly Desires"; furigana meaning "Pound Phoenix/Cannon"): This attack uses the air itself to slash the target from a distance. To initiate it, the user first holds one of his swords horizontally above the shoulder of his sword arm, and then performs a circular swing that launches the air compressed projectile spiraling towards the target. (21 Mastery, 21 Strength and 21 Movement Speed) Destructive Potency Rank: C
    You should also describe your general attacks a bit more indepth as well.


    @Fanboy sins
    New format is much more fluid. You described well and it was funny at times. Nothing to complain about really, other than you could have had more of the good stuff, and maybe a bit more personality.
     
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    Indra Big Mom Smoothie

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    Battleground #44
    Contestant 1: @Smileyman
    Contestant 2: @Spoiler Alert

    Winner: @Spoiler Alert
    Win Condition: Opponent fainted from damage.

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    @Beerbottle
    How do you see each other before Bounty climbed the rock? It's there to obscure view. Could also use a bit more personality.


    @Bounty
    You need to describe your character using Rankyaku better. You never even say if they are vertical, diagonal or horizontal. How do you see each other before Bounty climbed the rock? It's there to obscure view. How do you rank up in an agency of secrecy by becoming well known?
     
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    @Chris Mic
    Was funny, well described and had a lot of personality. Not blown away, but very good. You improved a lot.

    @Cpt.
    You also described well and had a lot of personality. Not anything to.really complain about.
     
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    @Major Lee Hung
    Great description and clash of convictions. Only thing i can comment on is that your flashback felt lacking and rushed compared to the rest. Not bad but just not as good. The end was brutal.

    @Mirror D. Roogy
    Great description and clash of convictions. Only thing i can comment on is that your flashback felt lacking and rushed compared to the rest. Not bad but just not as good. The end was brutal.



    Yes, i copy pasted it. Deal with it.
     
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    @Indra
    Simplistic descriptions, though you are improving in describing your attacks. Was very abruptly ended.


    @IceTimeXI
    In your first post you say you shoot. Shoot what? Your descriptions were very simple and lacked personality. Was very abruptly ended.
     
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    @Fanboy sins
    The music plot device was funny, and you have improved. You also paid well attention to your bullets. In this instance here however I think you should have described yourself performing the attack instead of planning it in your head and then just saying you did that.
    @Enryu
    Well described, but I souldnt have to look up your techniques
     
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    @Indra
    Which rocks are you standing on in the first post? You don't start out on them, nor do you describe moving towards any rocks. You did well to improve your personality a little though. You're also improved your descriptions. Still could be better, but you're improving.



    @joby
    Well described, funny and overall a lot personality.
     
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    @Smileyman
    How did you sense where he was and what he is without CoO? Even with CoO how would you know he's CP? Well described though during the fight. The flashing part was just weird though.


    @Spoiler Alert
    You're doing an awful lot of autohitting. You need to also describe your attacks better. Saying that you use a shigan or rankyaku is not enough.

    Not deducting, just a tip:
    Try referring to yourself as something other than just "Rob" You use it almost 4 times per post. You can call yourself by an epithet, or "CP agent" or other things.
     
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