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  1. Fanboy sins

    Fanboy sins Another Brick in the wall.(but purple neon one) Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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  2. Stealth Black Sanji

    Stealth Black Sanji I am Lucifer Morningstar Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Smoothie

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  3. Larsi

    Larsi

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  4. Fanboy sins

    Fanboy sins Another Brick in the wall.(but purple neon one) Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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    Nero @luffy0206 VS Dabit @Dabitdavo review by @Fanboy sins

    Nero
    Personality:-20

    Story Progression:-18

    Combat Prowess:-14

    Descriptions:-17

    Enjoyable:-18

    Post Count:-9

    Rule Breaks: 0

    @luffy0206 Score: 5299



    DABIT
    Personality:-20

    Story Progression:-20

    Combat Prowess:-14

    Descriptions:-17

    Enjoyable:-18

    Post Count:-9

    Rule Breaks: 0

    @Dabitdavo Score:5471

    Personality: It is me again....Nothing new here.. Still best part of you guys

    Story Progression: early bandit fight scene was not really that thrilling. Avoid fighting with yourself please , or describe less those actions. Everything became way better when you two clashed,


    Combat Prowess:- Nero i know that Dabit has more options in those fights because of equipment. However try being more creative with battle. Also use ranked attacks too and add some rpg flavor .

    Descriptions: Choose what do you want to focus on wisely .

    Enjoyable: Story was enjoyable. Especially late part of it.

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  5. Roogy

    Roogy My Life As A Teenage Robot Wanted Cracker

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    @Sanji_
    Personality: 15
    Personality was very good given the constraints of being vampires.

    Story Progression: 13
    Story was okay.

    Combat Prowess: 14
    Combat was mostly engaging, but the lack of description for named attacks made it more difficult to follow in those instances.

    Descriptions: 15
    Description is strong in most places, but weak in some instances, such as named attacks.

    Enjoyable: 15
    Pretty good given the constraints.

    Post Count: 12
    EXP: 5433

    @Hakipotence
    Personality: 15
    Personality was very good given the constraints of being vampires.

    Story Progression: 13
    Story was okay.

    Combat Prowess: 14
    Combat was mostly engaging, but the lack of description for named attacks made it more difficult to follow in those instances.

    Descriptions: 15
    Description is strong in most places, but weak in some instances, such as named attacks.

    Enjoyable: 15
    Pretty good given the constraints.

    Post Count: 11
    EXP: 4980
     
  6. Stealth Black Sanji

    Stealth Black Sanji I am Lucifer Morningstar Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Smoothie

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  7. Fire Tiger

    Fire Tiger

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  8. Dabit

    Dabit Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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  9. Cpt.

    Cpt. Insterstella Ranger Wanted

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    Masquerade Round 1 @Fanboy sins vs @Handsome review by @Cpt.
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    George
    Personality: 13
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    Story Progression: 13
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    Combat Prowess: 18
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    Descriptions: 19
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    Enjoyable: 18
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    Post Count: 6
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    Rule Breaks: 0
    @Fanboy sins Score: 3196 (non-canon)

    Dagon
    Personality: 13
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    Story Progression: 13
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    Combat Prowess: 22
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    Descriptions: 19
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    Enjoyable: 18
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    Post Count: 5
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    Rule Breaks: 0
    @Handsome Score: 2849 (non-canon)

    I don't have too much to say. What you guys wrote was pretty damn awesome. Personality and story progression aren't integral here according to the rules so those scores are left at a flat average. The combat was really well written from both of you, but Handsome's was a bit more visually appealing to me. I would have liked you guys to both write a bit more since it was a good read :)
     
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  10. Ziosa

    Ziosa Rest in peace OJ Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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    REVIEWED

    Name of fighters(name and level): Jade Level 58 ([@Ziosa) VS Thresher Level 10 (@SageDGod )
    Link to start of fight: https://orojackson.com/threads/revolutionary-officer-vs-member-jade-vs-nordstrom.57360/
    Link to end of fight: https://orojackson.com/threads/revolutionary-officer-vs-member-jade-vs-nordstrom.57360/#post-3701776
    Extra info: Hasnt been replied to since november
    --- Double Post Merged, Feb 19, 2019, Original Post Date: Feb 19, 2019 ---
    Only reviewed the people still playing

    @Frayzah
    Personality: 16
    Story Progression: 15
    Combat Prowess: 0
    Descriptions: 17
    Enjoyable: 16
    Rule Breaks: 0
    Feedback: Giving you a bit of leeway for everything as this thread was a mess with all the people quitting half way through etc, but your earlier posts could have been longer though.
    Total EXP Awarded: 6,254

    @Capt_NakedPanda
    Personality: 17
    Story Progression: 15
    Combat Prowess: o
    Descriptions: 16
    Enjoyable: 16
    Rule Breaks: 0
    Feedback: personality was strong and you had enjoyable moments and interactions; the part where you fired a flare at lee stands out. story could have done with some work though, you just responded to people really.
    Total EXP Awarded: 1,876

    @Emperor Cross
    Personality: 15
    Story Progression: 15
    Combat Prowess: 0
    Descriptions: 16
    Enjoyable: 16
    Rule Breaks: 1
    Feedback: Didnt post stats during the thread so you get a rule break. also your layout of your posts could do with some work, hard to tell what is actions etc
    Total EXP Awarded: 1,598

    @Roogy
    Personality: 15
    Story Progression: 16
    Combat Prowess: 0
    Descriptions: 16
    Enjoyable: 15
    Rule Breaks: 0
    Feedback: short posts at first but due to amount of stuff you had to rp its not too bad, just next time add more stuff maybe
    Total EXP Awarded: 3,996

    @Ruffles
    Personality: 16
    Story Progression: 15
    Combat Prowess: 10
    Descriptions: 13
    Enjoyable: 15
    Rule Breaks: 0
    Feedback: feel you should have posted stats but didnt mark it as rule break due to being a nitpick tbh. combat and personality was fitting to the characters, could have done with a bit more description.
    Total EXP Awarded: 427
     
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  11. Riley Escobar

    Riley Escobar - The Wanderer - Wanted

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  12. Larsi

    Larsi

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  13. Fire Tiger

    Fire Tiger

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  14. Larsi

    Larsi

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  15. CAPTAIN KHAN

    CAPTAIN KHAN

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  16. joby

    joby Big Mom

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    @Pratham

    Descriptions: 16
    Combat Prowess: 0
    Story: 13
    Personality: 16
    Enjoyable: 13
    Rulebreaks:0
    Posts: 3
    EXP: 1016

    @Char Aznable

    Descriptions: 19
    Combat Prowess: 15
    Story: 13
    Personality: 19
    Enjoyable: 20
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 5
    EXP: 2896

    You both did a great job right off the bat (pun intended, chumps) with investing time setting the emotional scene of your characters and the state of mind they would be in for this event. However neither of you described your physical appearance or surroundings with any detail.


    Pratham, your descriptions of your desire for blood/to hunt for prey became a little repetitive over your three posts and you kinda made Char do most of the work of pushing things forward since you didn’t really describe your character’s actions in a way Char could play off of.


    Char, basically the only thing I could think to improve on would be physical descriptions of surroundings and a description of your physical features. You did a really great job of using sensory information that your character was experiencing to put me in their skin in a way, but I had very little idea of what was going on outside of their head. I felt like the way you brought in that kind of sick-to-your-stomach but also starving sensation was really effective and your descriptions felt visceral.
     
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  17. Larsi

    Larsi

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    @Fire Tiger
    Descriptions: 11
    Combat Prowess: 13
    Story: 13
    Personality: 12
    Enjoyable: 15
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 14
    EXP: 5405
    Overall I found your description a little lacking, especially early. You went through 3 areas before reaching the mansion, and you barely described those. Same with the mansion. You also should use images and gifs as aids to describe your moves, etc. not let them do it for you. It did improve later on though. You did however often not describe what bodypart of your opponent you were attacking.

    You were supposed to RP more of a mindless beast, but it was still enjoyable the way you did it. Overall use of surroundings was good, especially mid fight.

    @Dabit
    Descriptions: 13
    Combat Prowess: 13
    Story: 13
    Personality: 12
    Enjoyable: 15
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 14
    EXP: 5633
    Mostly same issues as fire tiger, but milder. The lamp was a bit too convenient tbh.

    Both of you i think overplayed your stamina and durability a bit, but you did it to the same degree. Overall enjoyable read too.



    @Cpt.
    Descriptions: 19
    Combat Prowess: 8
    Story: 20
    Personality: 18
    Enjoyable: 15
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 19
    EXP: 9946

    @Dragomir
    Descriptions: 18
    Combat Prowess: 8
    Story: 20
    Personality: 18
    Enjoyable: 13
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 18
    EXP: 9265

    The story was definitively the best part of this, and you would've gotten higher if you had actually finished it.

    Descriptions were a bit lacking on both parts when it came to your own characters. They came late if at all.

    Actual combat against someone else and not ones you yourself were RPing was almost non existent, apart from cpt controlling the chieftain vs drago, so i can't really put combat prowess high.

    Personality was pretty good overall.

    As far as the enjoyable being so low, that's partially because it was very confusing early with you both RPing the same character and me being very confused about who Alias was or anything about him. Also Drago, a lot of your jokes and references fell flat.
     
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  18. Larsi

    Larsi

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    @AL sama
    Descriptions: 15
    Combat Prowess: 14
    Story: 13
    Personality: 11
    Enjoyable: 10
    Rulebreaks: 1
    Posts: 4
    EXP: 1480

    @Cpt.
    Descriptions: 16
    Combat Prowess: 15
    Story: 13
    Personality: 12
    Enjoyable: 13
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 5
    EXP: 2136

    Not much to say. Neither of you really RPed mindless and AL autohit with a kick.

    @Fanboy sins
    Descriptions: 17
    Combat Prowess: 16
    Story: 16
    Personality: 17
    Enjoyable: 20
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 13
    EXP: 11521


    @Otis
    Descriptions: 19
    Combat Prowess: 17
    Story: 17
    Personality: 16
    Enjoyable: 19
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 9
    EXP: 8239


    @Dragomir
    Descriptions: 20
    Combat Prowess: 15
    Story: 17
    Personality: 19
    Enjoyable: 20
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 13
    EXP: 8320


    @NeoRetro
    Descriptions: 18
    Combat Prowess: 13
    Story: 15
    Personality: 17
    Enjoyable: 18
    Rulebreaks: 0
    Posts: 3
    EXP: 1630
    I liked the overall mood that you all created, each one of you. I actually laughed at the willy the mink part for example. I liked Otis' drink part, and the funny parts with Weil.

    You all had pretty good personality, though the part sbout gasparde being sad for his crewmate felt a bit forced and out of character. The profanity worked in this situation though drago, unlike the thread with cpt. The xbox reference fell flat though. The micheal "death" was funny.

    Drago was describing characters best, but he forgot to describe gasparde himself.

    Fanboy, haki doesnt help you swim lol. It doesnt make you stronger. If it had had an impact on combat i mightve given you a rulebreak.

    Otis, i enjoyed reading your combat descriptions but you need to describe using your romushiki, not just say you do.

    Lastly two things that didnt affect the score:
    Fanboy, you should use articles(the, a, etc) when writing, its a bit awkward to read when theyre missing

    This exchange:
    Needless is frickin saitama, decapating with a punch.

    Drago said a random person on the metchant ship was decapitated and neo misunderstood lol
     
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    joby Big Mom

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  20. Larsi

    Larsi

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