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    Larsi

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  2. Ziosa

    Ziosa Rest in peace OJ Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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    @Cpt.
    Personality: 20
    Story Progression: 24 (19+5 for Tyrant Information Thread)
    Combat Prowess: 19
    Descriptions: 19
    Enjoyable: 21
    Rule Breaks: 0
    Total Exp Awarded: 15521


    @Dragomir
    Personality: 18
    Story Progression: 19 (17+2 for Tyrant Info)
    Combat Prowess: 14
    Descriptions: 17
    Enjoyable: 21
    Rule Breaks: 0
    Total Exp Awarded: 12767

    No comments give as Cpt. said he didnt want me to do them
     
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    Larsi

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    Dabit Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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  5. Tartan Owl

    Tartan Owl Wanted! Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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    Father Vulpes is here to deliver that seasonal exp joy in time for Christmas for you good boys on the nice list :madmonk:.

    @Fanboy sins
    EXP Awarded: 7767
    Personality: 18
    Story Progression: 18
    Combat Prowess: 16
    Descriptions: 16
    Enjoyable: 25
    Post Count: 12
    Rule Break: 0

    @Yaksha
    EXP Awarded: 6902
    Personality: 18
    Story Progression: 16
    Combat Prowess: 16
    Descriptions: 16
    Enjoyable: 25
    Post Count: 11
    Rule Break: 0

    -Both of you had great personality. @Fanboy sins I enjoyed the sort of unfortunate underdog theme you had going on with Weil. @Yaksha you did a good job of expressing what kind of character Jinn is through his actions and dialogue.

    -Both of you had good descriptions of surroundings although I would like to see more details on what your characters look like.

    -Both of you did well in describing your attacks and showing the affects of fatigue and injury on your characters.

    -The overall pacing of the story was enjoyable. To be honest, this fight is my absolute favourite due to the amount if times I laughed out loud either due to Jinn's dialogue or Weil's actions. The humorous dialogue and the entertaining visuals were executed perfectly. Well done.
     
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    Ziosa Rest in peace OJ Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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  7. Cpt.

    Cpt. Insterstella Ranger Wanted

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    REVIEWED

    Me and @Dragomir agreed to end this a bit ago but I’ve been too lazy to post here/hoping he change his mind lol

    But since character swap is here

    @Cpt. in the 60s @Dragomir in the 50s
    First Post:
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    --- Double Post Merged, Dec 28, 2018, Original Post Date: Dec 24, 2018 ---
    Masquerade @Larsi vs @Frayzah review by @Cpt.
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    Faysal
    Personality:
    - 13

    Story Progression:
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    Combat Prowess:
    - 18

    Descriptions:

    - 18

    Enjoyable:
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    -6

    Rule Breaks: 0
    @Frayzah Score: 3086 (noncanon)

    Anodin
    Personality:
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    Story Progression:
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    Combat Prowess:
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    Descriptions:

    - 21

    Enjoyable:
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    -6

    Rule Breaks: 0
    @Larsi Score: 3251 (noncanon)

    You guys both followed the rules of the event well and had very good descriptions, since the requirements listed for masquerade are to have less story and personality I scored it as an "average" score of 13. Still I would have liked if you added a little more than you did.
     
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  8. Frayz

    Frayz Oh no! What have I become? Wanted Smoothie

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    Sorry about the wait but at least you won't be waiting until next year :madmonk:
    @IceTimeXI
    Score: 5308 (Canon)

    Personality: 5
    Story Progression: 2
    Combat Prowess: 9
    Description: 5
    Enjoyable: 6

    Post Count: 31
    Rule Breaks: 3

    Comments: Rule breaks are for switching Martial Arts way too often. Improves a little bit throughout but very little description, none at all for named techniques, and certain things you actually did describe seemed off; for example, 'they all sit on the ship on the golden sand beach' makes it seem like like you beached your ship, replacing 'on the' with 'anchored near' would of sounded more accurate. Literally no story at all besides 'let's get that bounty'. Personality just seems like a pretty generic bounty hunter to me, I was at least expecting some rapping. You stick to your stats reasonably well but I know you have more than 2 named moves, why do you keep spamming Sanjuroku Pound Ho, I get having a favourite but 4/5 named techniques? I'm only rating your combat this high because I thought using your blood to blind them and the pencil part were both cool.


    @Guan_Yu
    Score: 10503 (non-canon)
    Personality: 17
    Story Progression: 15
    Combat Prowess: 16
    Description: 13
    Enjoyable: 12

    Post Count: 31
    Rule Breaks: 15

    Comments: You know what the rule breaks are for so I won't get into it further. Description was great but knowing what I know, I found it difficult to rate any higher than that and it also effected the enjoyability of the fight majorly. I am highly impressed by the story telling however, especially considering that your opponent showed very little effort in this aspect and I know how demotivating that can be. Personality is just as good with most NPCs having their own. Combat was good, didn't overplay stats and you were creative with what was given to you.
     
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  9. Cpt.

    Cpt. Insterstella Ranger Wanted

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    Dragomir

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    @Ziosa
    Score: 6159
    Personality: 12
    Story Progression: 15
    Combat Prowess: 17
    Description: 13
    Enjoyable: 10
    @CAPTAIN KHAN
    Score: 5405
    Personality: 10
    Story Progression: 15
    Combat Prowess: 17
    Description: 12
    Enjoyable: 10
    Comments: You guys had a decently strong start but it died down really quick. Ziosa you should have done more to explain the scenery in your first post. KHAN, you should have picked up on his slack. Y'all did a decent job with the story progression as you ended the fight which was the only story I guess. Wasn't really much.

    I didn't really enjoy it, I mean it was basically vampire did this, vampire did that, bloodlust this, bloodlust that. Should have added some more flavor to it man. I know it's a 1v1 but could switch things up a bit.

    I feel like you guys should have done a better job expressing your bloodlust. Ziosa, you should have just jumped KHAN once the blood started to spill. Can't let that shit go to waste mentality. KHAN, you should have drank your own blood to not let another Vamp taste any of the precious blood that's spilling. Who cares if it's yours right?
     
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  11. Fanboy sins

    Fanboy sins Another Brick in the wall.(but purple neon one) Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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    To submitName of fighters(name and level): @Fanboy sins lv 55-54 and @Handsome Lv 43
    Link to start of fight: start
    Link to end of fight: end
    Extra info: Halloween event
     
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  13. Cpt.

    Cpt. Insterstella Ranger Wanted

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    Kame House @IceTimeXI vs @Guan_Yu review by @Cpt.
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    Ice
    Personality: 14
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    Story Progression: 13
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    Combat Prowess: 1
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    Descriptions: 10
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    Enjoyable: 12
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    Post Count: 6
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    Rule Breaks: 0
    @IceTimeXI Score: 2514 (canon)

    Ice, I think you are starting to incorporate a better setting description. It still could use more creativity and detail, but I saw a bit more effort than previous threads. I would like to see better word choice especially in this regard. It was noticeable in your first paragraph that you used the same word "island" in every single sentence. I thought it was very funny how your npcs reacted to the flip flopping of whether or not you wanted to visit the island and you made it unique by deciding over what was a longer period of time that normal. I noticed that you shorted your posts by a lot after the first post which is a same because I really saw some good progress at first.


    Roshi
    Personality: 10
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    Story Progression: 5
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    Combat Prowess: 1
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    Descriptions: 17
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    Enjoyable: 13
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    Post Count: 5
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    Rule Breaks: 0
    @Guan_Yu Score: 1883 (non-canon)

    I appreciate how you added some extra detail from what was on the wikia page. Try taking it a step further and give the reader those details by having a story action take place or creating your own description of the area rather than just mostly rewording the info. Personality-wise for a preexisting character you should try writing in the way they talk with slang. Master Roshi wouldn't say "nor" rather he'd say " 'er" maaaybe "or" same goes for "quite unusual". He's a pretty laid back kinda guy (which you showed by him napping), but the way you write him is very formal. Story progression wise you should try to move the narrative forward, but you didn't even answer the door or make a foundation for your own narrative. Kinda forced ice to do something out of character or make a redundant post (which he did the latter). Your second post had very good detail. You also had some noticeable grammatical errors, which aren't a big deal, but will disrupt the reader's flow. I think maybe you tried to initiate combat, but then just never responded...
     
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  14. Fanboy sins

    Fanboy sins Another Brick in the wall.(but purple neon one) Wanted Roger Big Mom Cracker Katakuri Smoothie

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    Nero @luffy0206 VS Dabit @Dabitdavo review by @Fanboy sins

    Nero
    Personality:-20

    Story Progression:-20

    Combat Prowess:-13

    Descriptions:-15

    Enjoyable:-18

    Post Count:-9

    Rule Breaks: 0

    @luffy0206 Score: 5213


    Personality: Strongest side of both characters. .

    Story Progression: You two made something enjoyable out of peaceful day.

    Combat Prowess:-Need to be more creative there. I know that

    Descriptions: Work on grammar please. Also , never Auto hit other player. I didn't count one post as a rule break , because it was hard to understand wording.
    Enjoyable: Story was enjoyable. Especially early part of it.




    DABIT
    Personality:-20

    Story Progression:-19

    Combat Prowess:-13

    Descriptions:-18

    Enjoyable:-18

    Post Count:-9

    Rule Breaks: 0

    @Dabitdavo Score:5385

    Personality: Best part of the story. Really liked conflicting points of view. Both of you were radicals thinkers and perfectly played your parts.

    Story Progression: You two made something enjoyable out of peaceful day.. (Pub fight would have given you two more options , but it was in your character to get out from there)

    Combat Prowess: Needs more creativity.

    Descriptions:- Have to write more per post. Be more Descriptive of attacks , area, people and other s stuff.

    Enjoyable:-Story was enjoyable. Especially early part of it.

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    Oreki Wanted! Wanted

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